In the excerpt from Urban Solutions “Tapping Tech
for Smoother Traffic”, Tay (2018) found that the advancement of technology is
necessary to maximize traffic efficiency over the decades. The Land Transport
Authority (LTA) has initiated to come up with solutions to resolve the issues
and how technologies are incorporated to ensure smooth traffic. The case study mentioned
that it is difficult for the undeveloped transportation system to keep up with
the dense population and economy. Not only that, disorderly bus services and severely
congested roads will result in further traffic delays and air pollution. Despite
having existing measures from LTA, Tay states that Singapore requires more
advanced traffic management measures to counter with the increasing vehicle
population and a more complicated road system. In order to ensure traffic
efficiency and safety on the road, Tay concluded that LTA will be working on
how to improve further on the development of transport technologies.
Source: Tay,Q W.
July 2018. Tapping Tech for Smooth Traffic. Retrieved from https://www.clc.gov.sg/docs/default-source/urban-solutions/urb-sol-iss-13
pdfs/11_case_study-singapore-intelligent-transport-systems.pdf
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Hello! Tiara, Sangara and Sammy here to comment:
ReplyDelete- Citation information and introductory statement clear. Sophisticated first sentence
- Correct problem statement
- Solutions are too vague
- Might want to include the part where the solution worked instead of just jumping to continual progression to improve the system.
- Conclusion needs more development
- Competent (key points are paraphrase clearly) but can still be paraphrased further
- Transition between sentences is good